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Aufgabe | On the photo i can see four people, who are talkting about something, I think about the job they all do. I think that they are all colleagues. That are two womans and two mens. There is a notebook on the table. The two mens are wearing a suit with a tai. The woman on the right is wearing a tai, too. The left on is wearing a suit, but in this position I cant see if she is wearing a tai.
I think this kind of work is good, because they can talk about things in the job. It is good for the teamathmosphere, so they work better. Everyone can tell his on opinion. It is good that there are womans in this job for a good work climate and it is not so boring. |
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Es musste ein Photo beschrieben werden. Der Inhalt muss euch ja nicht interessieren, ich möchte nur dass ihr mir die Arbeit so weit es geht korrigiert, weil dort müssen ja eine Menge Fehler drinnen sein. Ich habe für den Grammatischen Teil dieses Textes ausreichend bekommen.
Möchte gerne bessere Noten in Englisch schreiben und da kann ich eure Hilfe gut gebrauchen .
berger
Ich habe diese Frage in keinem Forum auf anderen Internetseiten gestellt.
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Hallo berger747, !
> On the photo i I can see four people, who are talkting about
> something, I think about the job they all do., maybe about their job. I think that
> they are all colleagues.
Besser: It seems if they are colleagues.
> That are two womans and two mens.
Sollte eigentlich in deinem ersten Satz stehen. Vorschlag:
On the photo I can see four people, two women and two men. The group is talking about something.
> There is a notebook on the table. The two mens are wearing
> a suit with a tai tie. The woman on the right side is wearing a tai (s.o.),
> too. The left on woman on the left side is wearing a suit, but in this position I
> cant am not able to see if she is wearing a tai s.o..
>
> I think this kind of work is good, because they can talk
> about things in the job.
Das verstehe ich vom Sinn nicht her. Woher weißt du denn, was die arbeiten?
> It is good for the
> teamathmosphere, so they work better. Everyone can tell his
> on opinion. They can tell each other their own opinions. It is good that there are womans women in this job
> for a good work climate and it is not so boring.
Nee, da stimme ich dir inhaltlich nicht zu, da du dafür keine Belege hast.
Liebe grüße,
Sarah
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